T Quinn's Online Journal

“Why is it you STOPP’ST of me?” he asked. This reason was for Tyler to tell his Father he will not be a Tottenham player like his father,Mark, but will play for his dream team-Arsenal.

“Father, although you are a close KIN, I feel that I should follow my dreams and I have decided to sign the 4 year contract with Arsenal for £275,000 a week. This is a once in a life time opportunity and I had no choice but to take it,” Tyler QUOTH.

” Why do you act like a LOON you stupid boy. Never go to Arsenal. They are full of nonsense and that is the end of it!”

Tyler was distraught. He went up to the sixth floor of his fathers mansion and then thought. Why listen to him. He is a grown man and he didn’t need his father telling him what to do. That thought stuck with him throughout the night and it was all he could dream about. Playing for Arsenal and scoring a debut goal  in front of all the opposing fans and laughing at them. It was amazing and he sighed when dusk finally rolled around.

“Post for you Tyler!” Mark exclaimed. Tyler sprinted down the stairs and grabbed the letter out of his hand. He peeked inside the envelope and saw the top bit of the Arsenal badge. He had the choice but CHUSE to go upstairs to his room for privacy. He braced himself. It was great news, he made the starting line up and was to attend training at 10:00. But it was 9:15. He chucked on a pair of tracksuit and sprinted out of the door without his father noticing.

“Have to go somewhere dad,” he SPAKE as he sprinted of into the distance. There was only 5 minutes before training and he was 2 miles away. Sprinting for his life he ran into the nearest 24 hour and got a bottle of water and dropped £1 onto the counter. He was off again. Powering down the road. Drivers were going at 20mph and were being passed by him. He would be ther with hardly anyime to spare. But it was a that moment he heard it. A DIN. It was as he looked to his right he realised. That was a horn signalling he was gonna hit Tyler. Sprintig as fast as he could be missed the car by a few inches and walked back up on to the pavement.He thought to himself that he rather be missing the goal by a few inches than being inches away from death.EFTSOON to that he was off again. Sprinting as if his life depended on it. He made it with 30 seconds to spae nd walked in to see absoloute beauty. Sanchez, Giroud, Xhaka and many more. He started playing and the training match begun. Tyler got passed a beautiful through ball and struck with enough power to break the net. Arsenal stood there, astounded. He had just scored against Petr Cech as if he was shooting agaist a 1 year old. He shrugged and played on. The final score was 2-4 to Tyler’s team and he left with a pat on the back and a,

” Welcome to the club,” from the manager.

2 days later- After beating Liverpool 2-1- another letter came. He opened it. A bundle of £50 and £20 notes. As if there was no way of putting his day down, his dad walked into his room.

” What it sitting in THOU’S hand?”

“My first wage for arsenal.”

His dad looked more proud then anything, surprising. He opened his arms and hugged Tyler. This was the first time in a few years that he had done this genuinely.

“WHEREFORE have you got this?”

” I played in the match against Liverpool.”

” I couldn’t be more proud of you.” Tyler could tell that he was telling the truth.

The next day Tyler was back at training. As he was about to kick the ball to get it on the pitch, the manager stuck his arm out.

” Hi boss. For what reason is it that you STOPPETH me.

“You cant train out of uniform.” It was at that moment the manager pulled out the other hand followed by a training kit. Tyler was ordered to go into the changing room and put it on. Once coming out, the group stood in 2 rows clapping him onto the field. After 1.5 hours of training, the match started. It finished at 18:00 on Friday and in the changing one player said,

” Guess what. I’m getting married tomorrow!”

” How des it feel to be a BRIDEGROOM?” Tyler asked

” IT feels good.” Nothing else was said after that.

It was the following Monday and Arsenal were playing the first game and Tyler was on the field for the first time. It was against Tottenham. He could see his dad in the left back position. As he walked onto the pitch ready for training. He could see how SHEEN the whole pitch was. He wasn’t the only new boy because there was another new boy on the Tottenham side. As the match was about to begin the Tottenham boy SWOUND. Medics rushed over and stretchered him off.

As he regained consciousness, he said,

” Did we win. I fainted didn’t I? Of all times! I hope this will ne’er happen again.” As the game came to an end, the goalkeeper flopped a goalkick and left the ball stranded in his own half. Tyler got straight onto it and was 1 on 1. He shot the ball as hard as he could and it was in the net before the keeper even registered to react. It was just like he imagined in his dream. It was like what his dad told him years ago. If you work hard enough, you a achieve anything.

 Stanza 1 to annotate:

The ice was here,the ice was there,

The ice was all around,

It cracked and growled, and roared and howled,

Like noises in a swound.

Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used 3 key different forms of language types. These consist of rhyme, repetition Iambic pentameter. The example of rhyme is around and swound. Not only is it rhyming, but it also adds an effect of a glum sense and the way he has used it  makes it seem as though you can feel this emotion yourself and makes you read it in a way that shows the kind of emotion Coleridge was attempting to create. Another language type Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used is repetition. Not only has he used it to create emotion and feeling, he has used the rhyme and repetition together to create a larger effect. By this I mean, when Coleridge used the rhyme it created a glum and dull effect. By using repetition and saying ‘the ice was here, the ice was there’ he has created a glum and dull effect, but by merging the two components together, it has come together even better. It works well together because the context of which he has used the repetition makes it seem as though it isn’t a positive time and he has managed to pull off  this form of repetition successfully.  The third, and final, type of language feature Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used is Iambic pentameter. It flows almost like a heart beat in the way of it going bu-dum bu-dum bu-dum. The thing I find most fascinating about this rhythm is that it actually goes well with the effect. By using this particular beat ,it makes it work with the rhyme and repetition in the way of making a glum effect. I feel that by using all of these language types together, it has worked together well to create this one big idea aout this stanza.

Stanza 2 to annotate:

The many men, so beautiful,

And they all dead did lie:

And a thousand thousand slimy things

Lived on; and so did I

Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used 4 key language types although I feel only 3 work well. These 3 things are rhyme, alliteration and an Iambic pentameter. The first key feature that works well is the rhyme. The thing I found about this stanza is the wording of the second line: ‘And they all dead did lie’. Coleridge could have easily just written and they all lay dead, but he chose to play with the wording and it worked because once finished it rhymes with I. I think using this rhyme has giving a different emotion to the first stanza I wrote about but it is almost along the same lines. In this case, it seems as though he is going for a sort of deserted and lonely touch to the poem. I get this feeling from the whole stanza because it firstly says about how all of the men were dead except him; this made it seem as though he is lonely and we know from the poem he is on a ship. Now that he is on the ship alone,in the middle of an unknown ocean, the fact it says that a thousand thousand slimy thing lived on and so did I implies he his alone with things that aren’t humans. All of these things are emphasized. From just reading the stanza and focusing on the rhyme. The second type of language used in this stanza is the alliteration. There are a few cases of alliteration in this stanza including ‘many men and ‘ dead did’.The alliteration itself doesn’t work well towards an effect but Coleridge has used something smart and made it work purely based on the lines he has written them in. ‘Many men’ itself doesn’t have much of an effect towards anything, however when these words are  put in the line-‘Many men, so beautiful’- it creates the effect that he loved them and he is now left with hardly anything but these slimy creatures. The third type of language that Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used effectively is Iambic pentameter. Again, like the first stanza, the beat is like a heart beat. It also works with the effect because it flows with effect of being deserted. Although the fact that he is alone on an unknown ocean with 50 dead men, the fact that it sounds like a heartbeat makes me think like he can hear is own heartbeat gives me the feeling of him being alone and deserted. Another point to add is that this stanza perfectly shows the kind of effect and point  Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used throughout the whole of this poem. This is that if you do bad things, bad things happen to you back. I know this because in the poem, the mariner shot the albatross which is a bad thing and after that through the rest of the poem, he has had all of these bad things happen to him.

Stanza 3 to annotate:

The cold sweat melted from their limbs,

Nor rot nor reek did they:

The look with which they looked on me,

Had never passed away.

The language features used in this stanza are Iambic pentameter and rhyme. Samuel Taylor Coledridge has used Iambic pentameter successfully in this stanza to create a kind of time passing quick. The thing that makes these two connect is how the rhythm of the iambic pentameter is quite quick and what connects it to the poemis that it is probably how fast his mind is rushing since he ca see dead people watching him.The other language feature that Coleridge has used is rhyme. The words that rhyme are they and away. I think, also like the previous stanza, Coleridge has tweaked the order of the words so that they can rhyme. He coud have easily wrote they did not reek or rot, yet tweaked the words and it made the outcome better and it added rhyme to the stanza. As well as this, Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used alliteration, but it didn’t work very effectively. The words he used are with which and although it is alliteration, it doesn’t work very effectively. I think this because the mood that Coleridge has created is a lonely and deserted kind. This alliteration does not really go with the effect and, for me, kind of ruins he great effect of the stanza.

Stanza 4 to annotate

Day after day, Day after day,

We stuck, nor breath nor motion,

As idle as a painted ship,

Upon a painted ocean

In this stanza Samuel Taylor Coleridge ha used man different key language features. These are repetition, Rhyme and Iambic pentameter. The first thing I am going to talk about is the repetition. The way that Coleridge has used the repetition was to pass the time quickly. By using day after day twice, it shows that Coleridge is trying to pass a very long period of time over just a few words. I find this good because normally poets would write something like days passed, weeks passed and so on, but the way that he has used this is n the poem is better. Another ting that Samuel Taylor Coleridge has used is Rhyme. The way he has used the rhyme works because the line with motion was speaking about how still the ship was and the line with ocean  is about how still the sea is; showing how closely related they are. The final thing  am going to talk about is the Iambic pentameter. It has a bu dum bu dum bu dum and then a gap to mae the classic beat. I think it is kind of out off place. I think this because the rhythm is quite fast which is ironic because the whole stanza is about how still as slow everything is and then you have the rhythm going quite fast.