Sprinting down the road, he desperately tried to keep running through the agony. After another few hundred meters he dared to stop and brought up the courage to look down. It was worse than he thought. Blood was seeping out like pouring milk into cereal. He cried out for help. Approaching him a black blur faced him. What at first seemed to be a hand looked a whole lot different a few seconds later. A huge bang rung his ears. The world went quiet. The world went black.
November 3, 2016 at 1:22 pm
Hi Tyler.
This paragraph shows your ability to use a range of different sentence structures to deliberate effect. I’m very impressed by this. You have indeed written a paragraph that succeeds in unlocking the ‘perfect paragraph’ badge – though I’d probably ask you to add “Huge bang rung in his ears.”